Submitted by Carlee Mallard (not verified) on Sat, 05/08/2010 - 10:07am.
I agree with Edward. I like this one a lot -- but there does need to be a direct call to action at the end. Maybe "Share your truth with us at the next great generation dot com"
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Submitted by EdwardBoches on Sat, 05/08/2010 - 9:08am.This works pretty well. Could really use it. Needs one more line of copy at the end:
"join us at the next great generation dot com. where we can speak for ourselves."
or
"join us at the next great generation dot com. where our generation speaks for itself."
or something like that.
Good stuff.
Edward
Good stuff!
Submitted by Carlee Mallard (not verified) on Sat, 05/08/2010 - 10:07am.I agree with Edward. I like this one a lot -- but there does need to be a direct call to action at the end. Maybe "Share your truth with us at the next great generation dot com"
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